Thursday, October 23, 2008

THESIS STATEMENT

Even though there was a large crowd of people outside of the school. They were throwing things and shouting. As soon as Bridges got into the school, white parents went in and brought their own children out; all but one of the white teachers also refused to teach while a black child was enrolled. In 1960, when she was 6 years old, her parents responded to a call from the NAACP and volunteered her to participate in the integration of the New Orleans School system. Because Ruby Bridges played an important part in the Civil Rights Movement.

REVISED THESIS STATEMENT:Ruby Bridges was a very brave child!she made history when she stepped foot in front of william frantz elementary school of all whites. In front of the school there was a large crowd of people outside the school. They were throwing and shouting things at her.As soon as bridges got into the school,white parents went in and brought their children out;all but one white teacher didn't refuse to teach ruby because she was black.In 1960, when she was 6 years old,her parents responded to a call from the NAACP and voluntered her to participate in the integration of the New Orleans School System.Also she played a important role in the Civil Rights Movement.

1 comment:

Mr. Ackerman said...

This is a great start. You need an introduction and revised thesis statement. Try to use an opening style that will grab the readers' attention.

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